Sunday, March 13, 2011

activity 1 describing hometown


Writing 1 Activity 1
Describing hometown
P1 D3
My Hometown
My name is Vincensia Alfa Bhineka Putri. I was born in Padang on 27 September  1992, but my parents doesn’t come from Padang. My father comes from Muntilan, in the middle of Java and my  mother comes from Sumba, NTT, but they work in Padang. And for me, Padang is my hometown because I have been living here since I was born.
                Padang is not  a crowded city, except in the morning, because there are many people want to go for work and anything else. But in the noon and evening, Padang is free from the traffic jam. But now, people like to drive car and ride motorcycle rather than walk, so there are more pollution in Padang then before.
                Padang has many beautiful places to visit. One of them is beach. I love to see Padang beach. It has beautiful waves. I can see sun rise and sun set there. Tourists  like to visit it too. Some tourists like to eat traditional food too in Padang, like Ikan Bakar, Jagung Bakar, and anything else.  Beside of Padang beach, there are many beach in Padang, like Air Manis beach, Caroline beach, Nirmala beach and anything else.
                But now, people scare to go to the beach in Padang because of the earthquake that happened at 30 September 2009 and because of the earthquake, there are many victims in Padang. People scare, if the earthquake happen,  tsunami will come. Now, we just can pray to the God and hope the disaster never come to my lovely hometown.
                That’s all about my hometown, and if you want to see the most beautiful beach, you must come to Padang and I think you will not disappointed to visit it.

4 comments:

'YuLia aMnha' said...

i think,
your esaay is good so far,
but,
you shouldn't give contraction in writing essay,
and add more information about your hometown..


keep writing to be better.. ^_^

Helza_Hardyanti said...

if you use conjunction "but" do not use "coma"
do not began paragraph with conjunction (paragraph 2st)
in the third paragraph do not make a simple sentence. it make you used many "dot" and "coma"

do the best for your writing ^^

Awlia fadhli said...

i think your essay is good enough...
but you still hve mistakes in sentence structure and dictions..
so, i think you still need to revise it and still need improvement..

Unknown said...

Padang is the city where we belong to.
that is good essay alfa!!
and keep writing!!

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